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2. Developement
3. End, conclusion
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A memorable day in my life
I got an apartment in Tarragona, and I have friends there from very small. The day I turned eight years old, my mother decided to prepare a surprise party, where she invited all my friends.
I came to my house with my father, who came to buy something, and I came into my house and suddenly all left where they were hiding, all the walls were filled with posters congratulating, and a table full of food and presents. Everyone came to congratulate and hug. We went to the table to eat, then took out a cake with the number eight, and I remember that at that time I dropped a tear from my eyes,although I didn't know the reason, but only I know that the tear fell, that was the moment nice to remember all afternoon, we ate the cake and then gave me their presents, which still save.
We were all to playing with my presents to the swimming pool during the whole afternoon. It's the most memorable days pf my life, just by being with my family and my friends in one day so special to me.
Mario Giménez Izquierdo
the memorable in my life is The day in that return my dog why he dissapared in the forest.
This day I go to my father's house in the his truck I think in this moment when I was going down the truck, the dog turned.
in this moment when I go down the my fathers truck I saw a dog , I sacred because this dog approached
, I realized this is my dog and I'm really happy because my dog returns
A memorable day of my life was when I went away with my parents and my brother to Montmeló when the race of F1. We come to the circuit on nine o'clock exactly of the morning.
When we come to the circuit and sit down in the principal platform of the circuit we saw Antonio Lobato interviewing Fernando Alonso in the gridiron. At two o'clock in the afternoon exactly began the race.
In the return trenta and five Fernando Alonso broke the engine of his car and the whole step applauded it for his attempt of making one good it deals. Felipe Massa won the race.
My memorable day in my life is very recently was this year in october when was my birthday. I celebrated with my friends and my family old the weekend.
The weekend of my birthday started on Friday in the evening I went to my grandmother house. On saturday morning my friends amd me went to Cunit for stay away old the weeken. In the afternoon we went to a disco with them was very happy. At night in my house we played cards, with a consola and more plays until four o'clock. Sunday we went to the beach thought the time don't was very good, after we return to El Prat.
In the afternoon I stayed with my parents and my brother.
This weekend in special on Saturday was very special with me.
A memorable day in my life is when were my first cruise, Mediterranean. I went with my whole family.
I were unforgettable. We visit Monaco, Italy, France, Tunisia,
one week, we were visit monuments, and buy the typical product of each place.
In the cruise were persons the other places, Englishmen, French and others.
I were my first cruise and never forget. I can to do more cruises.
My memorable day by Adrià Soriano
I was of vacations in a cruise. It was the first time that I mounted in a boat. It was day 20 of August of 2006
In the trip I was with all my family, my mother, my father, my brother and all cousins.
In that trip i knew one of my better friendly of Barcelona. In the cruise we were all the time in the swimming pool, and we visited the main cities of Greece: Athens, Mikonos…
Adrià Soriano
It waws April, 2008. In the morning, I decided to be going to see a football match between the RCDE and her maximum rival, FC Barcelona. The match would be disputed in the Camp Nou. The same day I went to buy the ticket.
In the evening, I went away to the stadium after spending a couple of friskings on the of the safety. Once in the field I met a few fasn of the RCDE. It he began the match and we put to encourage the team. But to 40 minutes of the match the ultras of the RCDE appeared, the Brigadas. Approximately 40 Brigadas put to sing and all together we were encouraging. But with the Brigadas the police apparead. They had us imprisoned in the seats and it wasn't allowed to us go to the washbasin. When end the match, with tie, the people were leaving the stadium but to us not us allowed the exit. After waiting an hour, we could go out, escorted by the police, to avoid disturbances.
After crossing streets escorted and monitored, they left us in a place of Sarria, and finally I me could go home with an unforgettable experience.
A memorable day in my life!
In August I celebrated my eighteenth birthay, It's the 15th of August, like every year I was in my town, Valladolid.
I have a lot of my friends in my town of my same age or older.
When my day arrived, my parents and my friends prepared me a party. I was very excited, because I didn't imagine that this could happen. My mother gave me a book with photos of my family, my friends and me, of all my life. It was amazing. I couldn't believe what was happening. It was a dream!
My parents also gave me a CD with many of my photos since I was children.
In the end, my friends and I went party, we went to the disco until late!
In conclusion, it was unbelievable!
A memorable day in my life was when my friends of my other school and me did a festival of end of the curs of secundary school.
My friends and I was a lot of time to prepare the festival and cost us a lot of work. In the festival there are a little theatre but I did three dances because I love dance.
When arrived the day of the festival, everybody was nervious and very happy and very amazing.
That day always will is in my because was a day very important for me and for my friends. We spent a lot of time to wait for the festival.
Memorable day in my life - Luana
My memorable day was when my little brother was born.
When my mother was pregnant, the doctor said that the baby will be a boy, then we had changed my brother's bedroom for receive the new baby.
It was strange see how my mother's body would change... We were so nervious for the big day! When this day came and I saw his face for the firts time, I thought 'Oh my God he's so perfect and... so smal!'
Now, it's so funny play with him. When he cry at the night.. I can't sleep! But I love him so much
A MEMORABLE DAY IN MY LIFE
If I need to try one day on my life , if I need to try one moment , I would choose the 10th of august of the last summer.
In this time I was on holidays , and I stayed on a camping in San Lorenzo del Escorial(Madrid).
In this camping I met a friends that now are very importants for me , and the last month they came to Barcelona to visit me.
This day in concretly we went to water park and passed all the day together.
We lived many memorable adventures .
We were swam, suffocating strictly between ourselves, and doing tails in the attractions with the floats.
We talked about many things while we were eating , and I remember this things all the days.
We passed a fantastic day, for me the better.
My memorable day in my life was in 15th of July in 2007 aproximatelly. There day I travelled to Ibiza with my mother and my grandmother.
The aspects that i liked of Ibiza were beaches and people.
The beaches i liked because the water was very clear and transparent. I could see my feets under the water.
In the city there were a lot of turist bought all the types of things,things very expensives.
There were a lot of disco-bar around the beach and at the night all the people went to there.
The travel was very exciting and unforgettable. My family and me enjoyed with there travell.
A day memorable in my life is a 25th of July 2008. I went with a friend a concert of Rap that they were doing in Barcelona in which there were going out the 16 best rappers of Spain who appeared to the contest “Red Bull Batalla de los Gallos ".
The concert began at eight o’clock in the evening, we arrived there to the half past six, the doors opened them to the half past seven, and to measure that went going in went us seating in the chairs. When going in saw to my idol, a rapper that always wanted to see, lived in Madrid and saw it between the publish, and was to ask him a photo, this day achieved a photo with my idol. Afterwards were singing the 16 rappers and in the half of the concert, went out the one who at present is the best rapper of Spain to sing four songs, one of the four that sang was the song that more likes me. At the end of the concert there was an exhibition of Break Dance, is a type of dance related with the Rap that also likes I like much.
The conclusion is that this day was one of the best of my life no doubt, a day where did of the things that more like me, saw to my idol, listened the song that more likes me and saw to the best rapper of Spain.
( Sergi Muñoz Vera )
27th of November 2005 was a memorable day of my life because my cousin was born, called Artur.
It all started when my aunt told us she was pregnant with their first child, spent the time till it came the big moment of birth. I found out at night when my mother woke me up to tell me. At that time we dress and we went to the hospital, along the way we lost, but once there we saw a small creature, and since then is one of the most important people in my life.
Now it has three years but remains one little person to me captive from the first moment.
A MEMORABLE DAY IN MY LIFE
One of my passions is the world of motorbike. I haven't got a motorbike but it doesn't matter yet. I always watch on TV motorbike programs and my idol is Valentino Rossi, an italian rider. The memorable day in my life it's about this aspect.
My story started in the morning when a friend gave me some tickets to go to see a motorcycling championship in Montmeló. It could seem normally but this tickets were for enter in the VIP area! I accepted immediately.
When the great day arrived, I was in Montmeló and I saw a lot of important people including my idol. It was unbelievable! I took some photos of this place and I saw the race in a comfortable private seat.
After this amazing afternoon, I went home and when I was in my bedroom, I was thinking about the day. It was like a dream but, fortunalety, it was so real. Then, I realized that those day was the best of my life, a memorable day.
English- My Memorable Day
January 11,2007
This is the day that more remember,because I were the best birthday .
Iniatally I was nervous because though wise that woudls celebrate it everything was a surprise.
My friends and I go out in the night.
This after having celebrated it in house of one of them, my best friend.
I knew new people and amused myself very much, it will be an unforgettable day.
This away this day was special for being my birthday but also for the people with whom I was.
A MEMORABLE DAY IN MY LIFE
A memorable day in my life was my niece's born.
She was born the 4th of November in 1999.
This day was very important in my life because I could see my niece for the first time.
First,I went to the hospital with my parents for visit my sister and my niece.
When I could see my niece I was very happy because she was a very beautiful baby.
My sister and my niece was three days in the hospital because they needed rest and finally they returned at home.
A memorable day in my life was when I was eight years old: the April, 9. This day, I celebrated my comunion.
In the morning, I woke up at eight o'clock and I went to the hairdresser's. Then, I returned to my home and I began to dress. Later, I went to the curch and the ceremony has celebrated. As soon as the ceremony has finished my family and I went to the restaurant. The name of the restaurant was "Casa Alcala" and there were lot of people. We ate, we played with other people and I recived a lot of money.
At finally, we saw a lot of clowns and we danced a lot. I was very happy because there was a big party. It was one of my memorables days.
My memorable day is the first time I went to a concert. It was the 7th of February 2006.
Simple Plan is my favourite group and they made a concert in Barcelona three years ago. The concert started at 9 o'clock at night, but my friends and I went there at 5 o'clock, we were waiting for four hours. I was very excited because I was going to see to my favorite group in concert.
When it was 9 o'clock we enter into the enclosure, we were at the 6th line. Fifteen minutes later the music started. All the fans started to jump and sing.
The group talked catalonian to impress us, it was funny because it's strange to see some people talking a language that's unknown for them.
I had a lot of fun and I also cryed because the concert had ended. It was the best day of my life
A memorable day in my life
A memorable day in my life was when I travelled to Paris with my cousin. I had 15 years and for my was a very special trip because I never had a trip out of Spain and neither I and my cousin had a trip both alone ones.
We were in plane and were 3 days in the city. The trip we made in the Easter week.
We visited a lot of places and bought a lot of presents for our family. I liked many Paris and I am waiting to return to go again.
That trip I never forget it.
May 25th, 2007 was the best day of my life because I was with a person who meant a lot for the short period of my life, a person who opened my eyes and I fell completely.
We took a walk through the village, we went to the beach. We spend so cool.
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